I studied at Department of Applied Foreign Languages, National Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior High School. I chose English as my major due to I thought that English was important. At first, I was not really enjoy about studying English. However, with my teacher' s instruction and help, I read many English magazines, novels and practiced English oral speaking with friends. Gradually, I have found that English is more interesting than I thought. For example, some magazines were involve a lot of information and interesting stories which made me more willing to learn it. Besides, I also listened some English songs and English movies to practice my English listening capability. Moreover, I can use English to talk to foreigners which could
increase my international perspective. In the process of learning English, I encountered many difficulties. But I always hold a positive attitude toward overcoming them. One of them was that it was hard for me to understand a reading text containing too many words that I don' t know. To overcome this obstacle, I tried to figure out what the article means by skipping the words that I am not familiar to and try to increase my vocabulary. As a result, I have improved my English reading skill step by step.
Apart from studying hard,
I also learned a lot from the relationship between my classmate and I. For example, we were struggling with each other during the sport meetings. Though the process was a little difficult, we won the
Spirit of the total title at the end. After this, I learned that unity is strength and had a lot of memory in my mind.
As for clubs, I participated in the Japanese converation club when I was a freshman. Because I think that the more leaguages I learn, the more superiorities I have. Besides, I really interesting in Japanese culture and lifestyle. As for me, participated in the club was a chance for me to know and learn more about Japan. At secend semester, I join the guitar club to learn more ability. Thought I was not mester in it, I was very great about contacting another musical instrument.
English was important //用現在式吧
回覆刪除enjoy about studying // about 拿掉
hold a positive attitude toward overcoming them //overcoming them 直接寫everything就行了
後面的One of them 可以寫 for example
superiorities 用adventage會不會好一點呢
mester in it // master it
還有阿 其實裡面有很多地方的時態怪怪的 我建議你重新再審讀一次喽 抱歉喽 我沒有全部列出來
還有聽音樂要用 listen to
你可以把你當選禮貌楷模的事寫出來阿 突顯你的個人經歷 不然這篇如此平鋪直敘的文章 可能比較難讓人留下印象
還有經過了這些事 你有沒有什麼深刻的體悟也可以寫出來
due to I thought that English was important.
回覆刪除-->due to 後是接名詞唷
I was not really enjoy about studying -->I didn't really enjoy studying
For example, some magazines were involve
-->For example, some magazines involved
I also listened some English songs --> I also listened to some English songs
As for me, participated in the club was --> As for me, participating in the club was
I am not familiar to --> I am not familiar with
between my classmate and I.--> between my classmates and I.
I really interesting in --> I really interested in
mester-->master
我覺得整體還不錯唷
你把選擇英文的原因寫出我覺得很好
回覆刪除However, with my teacher' s instruction and help, I read many English magazines, novels and practiced English oral speaking with friends. Gradually, I have found that English is more interesting than I thought.
怪怪:However, with my teacher' s instruction and help, gradually, I found that English is more interesting than I thought.比較順~
I read many English magazines, novels and practiced English oral speaking with friends這些有點冗贅
下面馬上接著For example, 我覺得很棒!
你還把遇到困難的例子寫出來,很棒欸~~~!!
而且解決你reading的方法也寫的很好唷,我也不喜歡看長長閱讀文章欸=ˋˋ= "志同道合"XD
最後一段社團部分我建議先寫吉他,說你除了學習語言外還積極學習其他專長;在提及日語,因為比起吉他你日語強太多了,會有層層遞近的感覺,而且你可以誇耀自己說我除了英文之外一有點精通日語,學習多種語言是我的夢想之類的~~
第八行 I also listened some English songs
回覆刪除listened後面少加to
最後一段Japanese converation club 是conversation^^
後面的more leaguages I learn 是languages XDD
As for me, participated in the club這句
主詞是人 所以是participating喔
文章裡關於課外活動或特殊經驗的部分可以再多寫一些 這樣這篇文章就會變得更好:))