I once lived in Taipei
第三行she was badly hart(hurt) by the car
回覆刪除同行she was rush to(應為rushed to)
The police felt (that was 應為it) strange for the woman to do it
第五行woman’s family were poor
倒數第三bought (brought 吧)
And (Therefore), she was(became) more optimistic for her life.
我呀一直不清楚像是so, and 或but 可不可以放在一個句子前。它們不是連接詞嗎，不是應該連接兩個句子＠＠?
像是妳有三句都是這樣ex:
1 But the driver said that she was rush to the middle of the road.
2 So the woman wanted to kill herself to lighten the burden.
3 And she was more optimistic for her life.
嗯 我的很大疑問-。。-!!
But the driver said that she was rush to the middle of the road.
回覆刪除rush是動詞 把was rush 改成 rushed
And she was more optimistic for her life.
應該是 And she was more optimistic about her life
opportunities 改成單數應該會比較好
回覆刪除The police felt that was strange for the woman to do it-->The police felt it strange for such an old woman to do it.會不會比較順呢?
剩下的問題就是靖苡說的囉~~
After they called for her son, they realized that the woman’s family was poor.
回覆刪除call for是需要\可改成found
第四行The police felt that was strange for the woman to do it中的felt可以改成considered
回覆刪除→The police considered it strange for the woman to do it.
After I heard this story, I always bought something for her and talked to her.
回覆刪除感覺跳太快了~
After I heard this story, I think she was a person who needed helps. So I always bought something useful for her and talked to her.
我覺得這樣比較有連接的感覺~
參考看看囉~
One morning an elderly woman was sent to the hospital,(and) she was badly hart by the car.要有連接詞
回覆刪除she was badly hart by the car.
回覆刪除裡的hart是hurt
she was rush to the middle of the road
是她被跑到..應該去was改成rushed
The police felt that was strange for the woman to do it
felt that要加it
以上~
我盡力了!
一起加油吧!
=目
It really felt good to get the opportunities to help people.可以改成It was really such a wonderful experience to earn the oppurtunities to help people who were in need.
回覆刪除One morning an elderly woman was sent to the hospital, she was badly hart by the car.->the應該改成a,hart->hurt打錯了
But the driver said that she was rush to the middle of the road.前面的driver可以加上who hit her by the car會比較清楚，不然不知道位什麼突然出現司機，感覺有點突兀，畢竟前面都沒有提到
she was rush to the middle of the road.->rush英改成rushed時態錯誤了
The police felt that was strange for the woman to do it可改成the police felt that it was strange of the woman to do such odd behavior.
After they called for her son, they realized that the woman’s family was poor. So the woman wanted to kill herself to lighten the burden.->可改成~, they found out the reality was that the woman's family was so poor that she wanted to kill herself to lighten the burden.