2011年5月18日 星期三
comparing-3
Girls are interested in being princesses in their childhood, including me. Disney princess series movies are also the staple in girl's daily life. Why those animation movies are so charming and attract for little girls. Below is the list of similarities between the two princess series movies. First of all, Sleepbeauty has beautiful princess and handsome prince. Similarly, Cinderella has beautiful princess and handsome prince. Besides, Sleepbeauty and Cinderella both has some plots about the brave prince save the poor prince. Moreover, Sleepbeauty was adapt from the famous fairytale. Likewise, Cinderella was adapt from the famous fairytale. On the other hand, Sleepbeauty is as well-known as Cinderella. The last but not the least, all the characters in the Sleepbeauty are alike those in the Cinderella. Both of them are pretty and cute. To sum up, why those princess series animation movies are so popular. I think that are due to their happy ending.
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第二行的 in girl's daily life
回覆刪除girl 跟 life 都要用複數 (不只一人)
第三行 attract for little girls
attract 是加to
第七行 the brave prince save the poor prince
王子救王子?? XDD 後面那個應該是princess吧~
倒數第二行Both of them are pretty and cute.
這個them指的是那些characters吧 因為both 是指2者都... 可是characters有好幾個 所以這裡不適合用both
除了這些小地方外 其他的都不錯~
attract 是搭配to 唷!
回覆刪除第六行Besides, Sleepbeauty and Cinderella both has(have) some plots about the brave prince(princes) save the poor(5這格形容詞彙不會怪怪鴨不要會不會比較好＠ˇ＠?) prince(princess哈哈=ˋˋ=).
我喜歡這篇文章-ˇ- 你的構思常常讓我覺得很新鮮:)
girl's daily life >> girls' daily life
回覆刪除attract for >> attract to
adapt要用ed喔
I think that are due to their happy ending
>> I think that is due to their happy endings
Sleepbeauty has beautiful princess and handsome prince. Similarly, Cinderella has beautiful princess and handsome prince.
回覆刪除→這邊感覺是說那個人名是有公子跟王子!!？
The story of Sleepbeauty has beautiful princess and handsome prince. Similarly, in the Cinderella also has beautiful princess and handsome prince.
喜歡這種新穎的題目，像我就沒想到!!
Girls are interested in being princesses in their childhood, including me.
回覆刪除>>>這邊用I am no except 會更好喔
Girls are interested in being princesses in their childhood,and I am no except.
很特別的一篇文章耶:>
Why those animation movies are so charming and attract for little girls. 要改問號喔:)
回覆刪除Sleepbeauty and Cinderella both has some plots about the brave prince save the poor prince. 這句BOTH後面要用HAVE~
why those princess series animation movies are so popular.-->要改?喔~
第二行in girl's daily life
回覆刪除--> in girls' daily lives
Why those animation movies are so charming and attract for little girls.
--> Why those animation movies are so charming and attractive to little girls?
Sleepbeauty --> Sleeping Beauty
First of all, Sleepbeauty has beautiful princess and handsome prince. Similarly, Cinderella has beautiful princess and handsome prince. Besides, Sleepbeauty and Cinderella both has some plots about the brave prince save the poor prince.這地一點和第二點的東西可能會有重複
還有這句The last but not the least, all the characters in the Sleepbeauty are alike those in the Cinderella.
基本上感覺說的東西都一樣 所以建議把第一點改掉
這篇文章的想法很好呢 不過 列點時要注意是否重複的問題
Why those animation movies are so charming and attract for little girls.
回覆刪除-->Why those animation movies are so charming and attractive for little girls.
First of all, Sleepbeauty has beautiful princess and handsome prince.
-->First of all, Sleepbeauty has a beautiful princess and a handsome prince.
Besides, Sleepbeauty and Cinderella both has some plots about the brave prince save the poor prince.
-->Besides, Sleepbeauty and Cinderella both has some plots about the brave prince saving the poor princess.
Moreover, Sleepbeauty was adapt from the famous fairytale.
--> Moreover, Sleepbeauty was adapted from the famous fairytale.
The last but not the least, all the characters in the Sleepbeauty are alike those in the Cinderella. Both of them are pretty and cute.
-->The last but not the least, all the characters in the Sleepbeauty and those in the Cinderellaare alike . alike為形容詞而且要放後面
To sum up, why those princess series animation movies are so popular. I think that are due to their happy ending.
To sum up, as for why those princess series animation movies are so popular, I think that it's due to their happy ending.
我還蠻喜歡這篇的
題材很吸引人~我喜歡灰姑娘~~
Girls are interested in being princesses in their childhood, including me.( Interested可以改成admire會比較好)
回覆刪除Why those animation movies are so charming and attract for little girls.(attract是attractive喔)
Besides, Sleepbeauty and Cinderella both has some plots about the brave prince save the poor prince.(~prince who save~)
Moreover, Sleepbeauty was adapt from the famous fairytale.(adapted)
On the other hand, Sleepbeauty is as well-known as Cinderella. The last but not the least, all the characters in the Sleepbeauty are alike those in the Cinderella. (last but not the least)
To sum up, why those princess series animation movies are so popular. I think that are due to their happy ending. (~,the reason why ~popular is that they all have their happy ending)
我滿喜歡這個比較喔~有童話幻想的感覺^^