2011年5月25日 星期三

Expressing an opinion-1

    People issue about meeting people through online dating sites or not for a while. Other considers it's dangerous to talk to strangers face to face, but the others thinks it's OK to make friends. In my opinion, I am in favor of meeting people through online dating sites. Due to you can make friends from another countries and practice your language oral abilities. Besides, it's secure if you have company by your family or friends when you meet people through online dating sites. Moreover, you can keep yourself from menace if you try to promote your sense of crisis when you meet people through online dating sites. While it is true that many people meet some danger when they meet people through online dating sites. I believe if you do this more carefully, you will enjoy about it. Because of these facts, it is self-evident that meeting people through online dating sites is not always dangerous.
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  1. 爾雅2011年6月4日 上午10:50

    第二行Other considers 應該改成others consider (不只一人)
    第三行others thinks 是think
    然後through online dating sites 出現好多次了
    改一下會比較好XDD

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  2. 靖苡2011年6月5日 凌晨12:13

    第ㄧ句or not for a while. 這是什麼意思壓＠＠?

    >>Some consider it is dangerous to talk to strangers face to face, but some think it is OK to make friends.




    大致上還Ok :)

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  3. 玲儀2011年6月5日 凌晨1:37

    Other considers it's dangerous to talk to strangers face to face, but the others thinks it's OK to make friends.
    >>>some ~ ,while others ~

    Due to you can make friends from another countries and practice your language oral abilities.
    >>>Due to 不接完整子句 ,s + v
    Due to making friends from another countries through the website, you can practice your language skills of speaking as well as typing.


    I believe if you do this more carefully, you will enjoy about it.
    >>>enjoy about it這句有點怪怪得

    有舉出自己的想法見解
    但句子與句子間可以更緊密點

    :>

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  4. 佳穎2011年6月5日 晚上7:43

    Other considers it's dangerous to talk to strangers face to face.-->Other consider it dangerous to~~這樣可能會比較順暢:d
    然後整偏的主詞要一致喔~看是要you還是I~
    大致上不錯:)最後的結論句很有說服力XD

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  5. 珍儀2011年6月6日 清晨6:15

    Other considers it's dangerous to talk to strangers face to face, but the others thinks it's OK to make friends.
    -->some consider it's dangerous to talk to strangers face to face, but others think it's OK to make friends.

    Due to 後面是接名詞唷~這裡應該是用because

    another countries--> another country

    和我的意見相反呢~過也是另一種想法呢

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  6. 曉芸2011年6月9日 晚上8:40

    People issue about meeting people through online dating sites or not for a while.(後面not for a while是??~有點看不懂@@)

    Other considers it's dangerous to talk to strangers face to face,(other people/others~to strangers by oneself~”面對面”感覺怪怪的><)

    but the others thinks it's OK to make friends.(用ok感覺有點太口語了~改成fine會比較好吧)

    In my opinion, I am in favor of meeting people through online dating sites.(~through online ~跟第一段第一句有重複到~或許可試著改成別種說法)

    Due to you can make friends from another countries and practice your language oral abilities. (開頭有怪~應該是there are some benefits such as making~這樣會比較好)

    Besides, it's secure if you have company by your family or friends when you meet people through online dating sites.(~company running by your~你是要說運作是由自家人的意思嘛??)

    Moreover, you can keep yourself from menace if you try to promote your sense of crisis when you meet people through online dating sites.(menance如果用threat會不會比較平易近人一點呢)

    While it is true that many people meet some danger when they meet people through online dating sites. (~is sure enough~get into~這樣才不會跟後面的重複到XD)

    I believe if you do this more carefully, you will enjoy about it. (I believe後面可接the more~the more~感覺會比較好=))

    Because of these facts, it is self-evident that meeting people through online dating sites is not always dangerous.(According to比較好~”因為”感覺怪怪的><)
    結尾有點弱掉~可以再加強^^

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  7. 椿茱2011年6月16日 晚上7:39

    1st People issue about meeting people through online dating sites or not for a while
    // issue 可以改成discuss 或是 talk over
    // or not 應該是會伴隨著whether出現
    // for a while 如果要表一段時間的話 前面建議可以用完成式
    Other considers it's dangerous to~~
    // Other considers it dangerous to~~
    but the others thinks it's OK
    // but the others think it's OK ((think不用加s
    Due to you can make friends from another countries
    // Due to you can make friends from another place/country
    it's secure if you have company by your family or friends when you meet people through online dating sites
    // it's secure if your family or friends keep company with you when ~~
    // when 後面要改喔 因為你的意思會變成(假使你的家人或朋友陪伴著你,當你見了某人透過交友網站…) 你的意思應該是 見了那個你透過交友網站認識的人吧?!
    While it is true that~~ 這裡有點突然的出現欸!
    you will enjoy about it // you will enjoy it ((不用about 因為enjoy 是及物動詞
    最後我覺得你的結論句下的怪怪的欸 改一下喽:D

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