Best of the semester-Discussing about the new factory in Action(3)

  Acton is the good place that has many friendly residents and beautiful landscapes which can attract many touist every year. In my opinion, I don' t support to open a large factory in Acton. Due to I think this small town should keep its natural resource. First of all, they could evolve tourism instead of destroying its natural views.  In addition, they can built some villas or hotels to attract some visitors. Besides, if there would built a large factory in this town, it will cause a lot of pollution such as air pollution and water pollution. Moreover, the environment will change and the industrial waste will make the inhabitants suffer from terrible diseases. Furthermore, with the increase of the population, the quality of life will get worse than ever. Additionally, the relationship between the inhabitants will become estrangement day by day. Due to those effects, I think we shouldn' t open a large factory in such clean and quiet place. To be complete in both respects,we should choose another industrial zone to construct this factory.

Best of the semester-Contrasting about two employees(2)

  At the begin of this semester, our university is hiring a new English instructor. Therefore, we issued this notice, then we get two resumes from two eligible people for this job. After thinking twice, we decide to hire Debra Fines. Below are some points, why we decide to hire her to be our new English instructor. First of all, Debra has more education than Lynn. In addition, those experiences can help her teach more professional knowledge to our students. Besides, Debra has various employment experience, while Lynn doesn't. Moreover, those experience may help her to show how professional she is. The last but not the least,  Debra has a publication, but Lynn doesn't. That is why she can help our students to improve their writing abilities. Although Lynn is a good teacher, we think Debra is more suitable to this position. To sum up, the final decision will be declare after we discuss in the meeting.

Best of the semester-Comparing about Cinderella and Sleeping Beauty(1)

  Girls are interested in being princesses in their childhood and I am no exception. Disney princess series movies are also the staple in girls' daily lives. Why those animation movies are so charming and attractive to little girls? Below is the list of similarities between the two princess series movies. First of all, Sleeping Beauty and Cinderella both have some plots about the brave princes saving the poor princess which are the stories in girls' dreams. Moreover, Sleeping Beauty was adapted from the famous fairytale. Likewise, Cinderella  was adapted from the famous fairytale. Furthermore, those fairy tales are building up girls' fantasies. On the other hand, Sleeping Beauty is as well-known as Cinderella. The last but not the least,  all the characters in the Sleeping Beauty and those in the Cinderella alike. All of the characters are pretty and cute in those two princess series movies. To sum up, as for why those princess series animation movies are so popular, I think that it's due to their happy ending.

revise-discussing effects-2

   When it comes to the most important decision in our life. Choosing a right career is one of the major event which will affect our lives. In addition, we should think twice before we choose it. The most important of all, we should do what we love and enjoy our job instead of doing a high-paid job that doesn't suitable for us. Instead, choosing a career that we major in. Due to we do a job that we are not professional, we will feel tried and depression. Moreover, with the bad mood causing by the frustrations in wrong career, we will become irritable and bilious. Therefore, the behaves we show will displeased our colleagues. Hence, we should think twice before we make the decision for our new job and ask for opinions from those who are experienced. After doing that, we can reduce the possibility of choosing the unsuitable career.

revise-discussing effects-1

  Acton is the good place that has many friendly residents and beautiful landscapes. In my opinion, I don'  t support to open a large factory in Acton. I think this small town should keep its natural resource. First of all, they could evolve tourism instead of destroying its natural views.  In addition, they can built some villas or hotels to attract some visitors. Besides, if there would built a large factory in this town, it will cause a lot of pollution such as air pollution and water pollution. Moreover, the environment will change and the industrial waste will make the inhabitants suffer from terrible diseases. Furthermore, with the increase of the population, the quality of life will get worse than ever. Additionally, the relationship between the inhabitants will become estrangement day by day. Due to those effects, I think we shouldn' t open a large factory in such clean and quiet place. To be complete in both respects,we should choose another industrial zone to construct this factory.

revise-discussing cause-2

    Buying a new house is the dream of everyone in the world, including me. However, it's not easy for me to buy a house on my own. However, it is several reasons for me to buy a house.  First of all, thought I don't have enough money to buy a house, I can borrow some money from the bank or friends. Besides, if  I buy a house with the good location, it may appreciate in the future. Therefore, I can earn a lot of money from selling it. So the analysis for the appreciation is important for me to do. Moreover, if I buy a house near some schools or companies. I can rent it with high rent. To sum up, buying a new house not only can make me live more pleasant and it can make me earn a lot of money.

revise-discussing cause-1

    I'm a business administration student. I have been asked to analyze a case about a closed music store. Below is a list of the reasons for why I think about it. First of all, its location didn't have enough population. In my opinion, he should choose a place near the shopping mall or the train station. Secondly, the owner of this music shop spent too much money on buying CDs for his shop. I think he can buy some second-handed CDs to reduce his budget. Besides, most kinds of the CDs were hip-hop and rock which can only draw some specific groups. Maybe he can buy some pop music which can attract more people. Furthermore, he sold per CD for 15 dollars, which was too cheap to earn money from selling them. In addition, he didn't provide the service to the customer who paid by checks and credit cards. Moreover, he hired too many clerks for his shop which may increase his financial burden.  The last but not the least, his work time is from 1 to 5p.m on Monday to Friday, which is the main problem about his failure. Due to the hours his shop worked didn't correspond to the rush hours; as a result, he couldn't bring more people to his shop. I suggest the owner should think twice before he plans to open a shop;otherwise, he will fail to his next investment.

Revised-Expressing an opinion-1

    People discuss about meeting people through online dating sites for a while. Some consider it's dangerous to talk to strangers face to face, but others think it's OK to make friends. In my opinion, I am in favor of meeting people through online dating sites.First of all, there are some benefits such as making friends from another country through the website, you can practice speaking English as well as typing. Besides, it's secure if you have your family' s or friends' company when you meet people through online dating sites. Moreover, you can keep yourself from menace if you try to promote your sense of crisis when you meet people through online dating sites. While it is sure enough that many people meet some danger when they meet people getting into online dating sites. I believe if you do this more carefully, you will learn a lot about it. According to these facts, it is self-evident that meeting people through online dating sites is not always dangerous.

Revised-Expressing an opinion-2

   We students are always complaining about wearing uniforms in the school. In addition, some of students even take action against it. However, wearing uniforms in the school has a lot of benefits for us. In my opinion, I support wearing uniforms in the school. First of all, we don't have to worry about our dressing and we can focus on our homework. Besides, it can keep us from danger when we are in the school. As a result, if some villains enter our school, teachers can notice them right away. Moreover, it represents our identities, and therefore, we will do things after thinking twice when we are in uniforms.  It is often argued that it is inconvenient to wear uniforms in the school. While, I think wearing uniforms in the school is student' s duty and responsibility. Taking all of these reasons into account, one must conclude that it is good for us to wear uniforms.

discussing effects-2

   Choosing a right career will affect our life. Therefore, we should consider a lot about the career we choose. The most important of all, we should do what we love and enjoy in our job instead of doing a high-paid job that doesn't suitable for us. Beside, choosing a career that we major in. Due to if we do a job that we are not professional, we will feel tried and depression. Moreover, with the bad mood cause by the frustrations in wrong career, we will become irritable and bilious. Therefore, the acts we show will displeased our colleagues. Thence, we should think twice before we make the decision for our new job and ask for opinions from those who is experienced. After doing that, we can reduce the possibility of choosing the wrong career.

discussing effects-1

  In my opinion, I doesn’ t support to open a large factory in Action. I think this small town should keep its natural resource. First of all, they could evolve tourism instead of destroying its natural views. Besides, if you built a large factory in this town, it will cause a lot of pollution such as air pollution and water pollution. Moreover, with the increase of the population, the quality of life will getting worse than before. Furthermore, the environment will change and the industrial waste will make the inhabitants get some diseases. Due to those reasons, I think we shouldn' t open a large factory in such clean and quiet place. All we could do is to choose another industrial zone to construct this factory.

        

revise-contrasting2

  Our university is hiring a new English instructor for the school this year. After we issued this notice, we get two resumes from two eligible people for this job. After thinking twice, we decide to hire Debra Fines. There are some points, why we decide to hire her. First of all, Debra has more education than Lynn. Those experiences can help her teach more professional knowledge to our students. Besides, Debra has various employment experience, while Lynn doesn't. Those experience may help her to show how professional she is. The last but not the least,  Debra has a publication, but Lynn doesn't. That she can help our students to improve their writing abilities. Although Lynn is a good teacher, we think Debra is more suitable to this position. The final decision will be declare after we discuss in the meeting.

revise-comparing-3

 Girls are interested in being princesses in their childhood and I am no exception. Disney princess series movies are also the staple in girls' daily lives. Why those animation movies are so charming and attractive to little girls?Below is the list of similarities between the two princess series movies. First of all, Sleeping Beauty and Cinderella both have some plots about the brave princes saving the poor princess. Moreover, Sleeping Beauty was adapted from the famous fairytale. Likewise, Cinderella  was adapted from the famous fairytale. On the other hand, Sleeping Beauty is as well-known as Cinderella. The last but not the least,  all the characters in the Sleeping Beauty and those in the Cinderellaare alike. All of the characters are pretty and cute in those two princess series movies .  To sum up, as for why those princess series animation movies are so popular, I think that it's due to their happy ending.

discussing cause-2

  Buying a new house is the dream for everyone in the world. However, it's not easy for us to buy a house on our own. First of all, we don't have enough cash to buy a house that is why we have to borrow some money from the bank or friends. But it may increase our financial burden when we pay the interest in the high interest rate. Besides, the location of the house is impotent about the appreciation in the future. But the analyze for the appreciation is difficult for us to do. The last but not the least, the security and the neighborhood is the main problem for us to think. In addition, we should investigate about it before we buy it. To sum up, we should ask some specialist for advice and think twice we decide to buy the house.

discussing cause-1

  I'm a business administration student. I have been asked to analyze a case about a closed music store this semester. Below is a list of the reasons of why I think about it. First of all, its location didn't have enough population. In my opinion, he should choose a place in the shopping mall or the main steet near train station. Secondly, the owner of this music shop spend too much money on buying CDs for his shop. I think his can buy some second-handed CDs to reduce his budget. Besides, most of the CDs were hip-hop and rock which can only draw some specific groups. Maybe he can buy some pop music which can attract more people. Furthermore, he sold each CD for 15 dollars which was too cheap that he can't earn money from selling them. In addition, he didn't provide the server about the customer who was pay by checks  and credit cards. Moreover,  he hired too much clack for his shop which may increase his financial burden.  The last but not the least, his work time is on Monday to Friday from 1 to 5p.m. which is the main problem about his failed. The hours his shop worked was not the rush hours that he couldn't bring people in his shop. After I analyze about this case. I think the owner should think twice before he planned to open the shop. Otherwise, he will failure in his next investment.